How not to write

Ace of Spades HQ has a piece on Joan Salvatto Wulff. I had not heard of Wulff, so I did a search.

One of the semi-literates who writes at Wikipedia opined:

“When she was 10, Wulff asked her mother if she could borrow her father’s fly rod, whom she admired and adored. After a few attempts at casting, the rod came apart, and the top section slid into the water.”

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Joan_Wulff

We have learned that as a child Joan admired and adored her father’s fly rod, and that said fly rod came apart after it made a few attempts at casting itself.

I read no more of the article.